12-11-2012, 06:24 AM
Hi Billy,
Thanks for the nice words (bit stunned really that I've managed to say anything of any relevance)
However suitably encouraged there's no holding me now....you'll start to regret it soon
Love the "it's in the line about watching TV. Manages to emphasise and convey the disgust and contempt for piggy wonderfully.
The line "I look for pork-cooking food channels", Still sounds off; forced or back to front to my ear.
I look for cooking channels with pork products -would be my offering here.
But whatever you do with your poem...I'm loving it.
Thank God for the Billys of this world
AJ
Thanks for the nice words (bit stunned really that I've managed to say anything of any relevance)
However suitably encouraged there's no holding me now....you'll start to regret it soon
Love the "it's in the line about watching TV. Manages to emphasise and convey the disgust and contempt for piggy wonderfully.
The line "I look for pork-cooking food channels", Still sounds off; forced or back to front to my ear.
I look for cooking channels with pork products -would be my offering here.
But whatever you do with your poem...I'm loving it.
Thank God for the Billys of this world
AJ