This is the Year (revision)

This is the Year (revision)

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12-10-2012, 07:34 AM

feels a lot tighter the 2nd and 3rd stanza. i like the clicks line on its own it creates an image of a Geiger counter. what i like about in general is the overall image of shit hitting the fan. the clicks line and the last stanza ties it all together.

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This is the Year (revision) - by Todd - 12-09-2012, 02:53 PM

RE: What Will Come to Pass - by billy - 12-09-2012, 05:19 PM

RE: What Will Come to Pass - by Todd - 12-09-2012, 10:33 PM

RE: This is the Year (revision) - by billy - 12-10-2012, 07:34 AM

RE: This is the Year (revision) - by Todd - 12-10-2012, 07:37 AM

RE: This is the Year (revision) - by arka - 12-10-2012, 01:55 PM

RE: This is the Year (revision) - by Todd - 12-10-2012, 09:40 PM

RE: This is the Year (revision) - by Brom Bones - 12-13-2012, 08:35 AM

RE: This is the Year (revision) - by Todd - 12-13-2012, 08:36 AM

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