Bath by candle light
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i think it carries a lot more clout after the edit. there is one line

there's nothing left in this town.

i suggested using there's at the beginning but after a re read i may have been wrong. other that a good edit.
i would however suggest another look at the grammar Smile
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Bath by candle light - by Keith - 11-27-2012, 09:23 AM
RE: Bath by candle light - by billy - 11-27-2012, 10:36 AM
RE: Bath by candle light - by addy - 11-27-2012, 02:28 PM
RE: Bath by candle light - by Keith - 11-28-2012, 08:08 AM
RE: Bath by candle light - by billy - 11-28-2012, 10:04 AM
RE: Bath by candle light - by penguin - 11-30-2012, 03:29 AM
RE: Bath by candle light - by Keith - 12-09-2012, 09:32 AM
RE: Bath by candle light - by billy - 12-09-2012, 05:36 PM



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