This is the Year (revision)

[billy]

This is the year


of a body that feels wrong,

a mother who is all appetite,

of a brittle hardness, not sure about the 1st line being strong enough but this stanza certainly is,

New dad,
 like you didn't use new mom in the previous, i'd have gone the same rout here.
baseball bat,

broken kitchen tiles,

blood-streaked faces, the anger is well showed but the new dad feels to weaken it's harshness a little too much. why are you using caps after a comma, why not just use a period to end the stanza?

New sister's chores,
her butcher knife
two inches from taking feels too talky
my eye.

Gnarled hands, i've heard this phrase quite a bit, gnarled hands, gnarled skin
twisted feet,
mocking 

retarded yelps the last 3 lines are really strong, they carry in their shortness a baseness of apocalyptic proportion.

thoughts of murder,
a fearful knowing
irrevocable
a switch clicks. a decent descriptive of pressing the button though thoughts of murder feels too trite.

submerged

in an icy pond

from which there is no pure nuke subs this stanza and the next line is a keeper


resurfacing.

i enjoyed the read but felt in places it wasn't as strong as it should be. specially, the thoughts of murder line. and new dad line. the end was excellent icy pond being a metaphor for a cold war scenario between two opposing sides. pond being a sea that separates.
thanks for the read.