This is the Year (revision)

[Todd]

Revision 2

of a body that feels wrong
a mother who is all appetite
of a brittle hardness

of drunken dinner slurs
baseball bats and broken
kitchen tiles, blood
streaked faces

a butcher knife poised
two inches
from taking
an eye

of twisted feet
of mocking
retarded yelps
a fearful knowing

bodies reduced
to just meat
irrevocable
a switch

clicks

submerged
in an icy pond
from which there is no


resurfacing

~~~

Edit: Tried on some of BB's comments and still thinking about arka's

Revision

of a body that feels wrong,
a mother who is all appetite,
of a brittle hardness.

of drunken dinner slurs,
baseball bats and broken
kitchen tiles, blood-
streaked faces,

a butcher knife poised
two inches
from taking
an eye.

of twisted feet,
mocking
retarded yelps
a fearful knowing

bodies reduced to meat
irrevocable
a switch

clicks.

submerged
in an icy pond
from which there is no


resurfacing.

~~~

Edit: Billy's comments helped me clarify some things.

Original

This is the year


of a body that feels wrong,

a mother who is all appetite,

of a brittle hardness,

New dad,

baseball bat,

broken kitchen tiles,

blood-streaked faces,

New sister's chores,
her butcher knife
two inches from taking
my eye.

Gnarled hands,
twisted feet,
mocking 

retarded yelps

thoughts of murder,
a fearful knowing
irrevocable
a switch clicks.

submerged

in an icy pond

from which there is no


resurfacing.