an experiment...is this prose ?

[arka]

prose. you are falling back on disjunction to create a poetic effect here but there is no compression and a lot of lax imagery. i like the narrative thrust here and think you should work on that. think of where the story goes. let the language fall into its own place. you also need to bit of proofing i guess. "maybe is just a friend" etc. good effort.

arka