Haiku

[billy]

This is a car wreck of a senryu / Haiku mainly because I dont know the difference and I didnt even catch the 5/7/5 its about people and nature but I'm not sure what that tells me.

I think I should let it slip under the ice and get carried by the undertow to the lonley place were dead seniku go.

no it isn't, just change a word or two and it's good to go.