The island of the lost and found

[billy]

hi tomh, i'm struggling to tie the title to the poem

Proud to play in concrete and glass i like the line but want to know why the pride
trapped by turmoil and toil
blink to catch myself
Club Tropicana calls to me is to me needed?
my mind breaks, applied this feels odd but i like the word play. a suggestion would be; 'my mind, brakes applied and have blinks again, start the next line instead of blink and 'i' instead of 'and'
blink again and miss myself

This time I spend with comets tail comet's (i think)
Men utter wasted hours
mused of Plato and Jackie Collins
my thoughts too easily read is my and too needed?
quick shift comes the horizon
never missed, wondered about

Reality wakes within a dream
or so it would seem
worried you ponder my post
on your shoulders I dance
this hour is fine
and my rhymes will shine this feels forced, is it needed?

apart from a few nits it's fine, but i would have liked to see it better tied together. in places it brings me up short and leaves me wondering to much as to what's actually being said.

thanks for the read