Her Soul Is Set Free

[Keith]

Our hearts were heavy. this is a bit cliche and would ask is it needed
Our souls pinned to the chair.Great line sets the scene
Our eyes broke like a levy strong image is Our needed as already saidas sorrow filled the air. could you find a different way to say this? as a bit cliche
Only thing moving was the TV. great line and image

Only thought was "that's not fair".

I had my family.

We had the biggest scare. the 3 lines feel a little weak

That maybe she'd live and suffer
more than we could love her.

But God did her justice and set her free.

Now, she can finally meet her mom
and reunite with old family. I like the ending it counters the heavey opening stanza

All round well worked poem, hope some of the comments help. Thanks TOMH