an experiment...is this prose ?

[billy]

looks like a block of poetry to me. i think a different format would better lay out some of the rhyme and rhythm but i think it reads as poetry. it feels like you have a few too many 'but's' near the beginning. lots of good lines lots of original passages. i love; [Once I tried to get in legitimately, passport in hand an some failed GCSE.] the last line feels a bit trite and forced. i enjoyed it. i was okay with some of near cliche because they worked, Always its just over the next horizon, borders on not working but it's a dream so it got through .

solid write, the block writing could work because it create a solid thing/iomage but i'd like to see this rappy bugger broken down to smaller chunks.