12-06-2012, 04:12 AM
i really enjoyed this 
the only thing i didnt liek much wos the repetitive 'I see'..was a bit much, maybe one at the start of each of the first 3 stanzas instead ? (i would say 4 stanzas but am sure somone would have me for bad english at "I see no knight" 
) tho sounds like it might work
i read this as the author is seeing the fall of his nation.. descending into chaos
the only thing i didnt liek much wos the repetitive 'I see'..was a bit much, maybe one at the start of each of the first 3 stanzas instead ? (i would say 4 stanzas but am sure somone would have me for bad english at "I see no knight" ) tho sounds like it might work i read this as the author is seeing the fall of his nation.. descending into chaos