Crayons

[Keith]

Fantastic! Love it.

the second verse breaks the rhythm quite a bit (the comma in the second line is unnecessary and made me lose track of things, and the third line breaks the stress pattern), but a part from that this is totally awesome.

Thanks!

I agree, have had another go, thanks for the comment

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This gave me flashbacks to my childhood when I had over a hundred crayons and pretty much all of them were broken.

I like the line "wax me a rainbow" a great first line. This was brilliant.

Thanks for your kind comments