12-04-2012, 07:42 PM
Fantastic! Love it.
the second verse breaks the rhythm quite a bit (the comma in the second line is unnecessary and made me lose track of things, and the third line breaks the stress pattern), but a part from that this is totally awesome.
Thanks!
the second verse breaks the rhythm quite a bit (the comma in the second line is unnecessary and made me lose track of things, and the third line breaks the stress pattern), but a part from that this is totally awesome.
Thanks!
If something happens and you can remedy it, Why worry?
And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
www.benjack.co.nz
And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
www.benjack.co.nz