12-04-2012, 05:34 AM
I particularly like the tranquility, it is suited to the subject matter.
A beautiful expression of that crystal path through the fog!
I guess the area that I would critique would be
Glad this time
That when looking into fog
And saying to the fog: “Its Buddhist out there,”
It just doesn't seem to flow as nicely as the rest of the poem. (although I couldn't say why, I'm too new for that kind of analysis)
A beautiful expression of that crystal path through the fog!
I guess the area that I would critique would be
Glad this time
That when looking into fog
And saying to the fog: “Its Buddhist out there,”
It just doesn't seem to flow as nicely as the rest of the poem. (although I couldn't say why, I'm too new for that kind of analysis)
If something happens and you can remedy it, Why worry?
And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
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And if something happens that you can't remedy, Still why worry?
www.benjack.co.nz