New user new poem

[kamirakara]

I get the feeling that there was this sort of mutual agreement between the two, and I love the conflict here. I have never read a love poem with this conflict before and therefore, in my opinion, I think it is very original. The opening is great, it made me read on automatically to see the end. The whole poem has a nice flow to it (I think it is because of the rhymes in the middle). I can really picture the whole scene! Great job!