12-03-2012, 04:34 AM
Thanks Billy and a_p for taking the time to comment, this is a idea that been bobing around in my head but i've struggled to make it work and your comments have helped a great deal, so now I need to have a re-do because with this one I want the reader to understand my tale. Thanks for the help TOMH
PS heres the authors note I dont like doing, the serpent is a hose pipe, the man is in his death bed, cant sleep and his wife crys, just wants to help but he cant speak and shes struggling to make sence of someting he did managed to say, then she works it out, helps him sleep but hes still dying. I know..... it needs some work
PS heres the authors note I dont like doing, the serpent is a hose pipe, the man is in his death bed, cant sleep and his wife crys, just wants to help but he cant speak and shes struggling to make sence of someting he did managed to say, then she works it out, helps him sleep but hes still dying. I know..... it needs some work
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