Fisherman's Friend

[Todd]

Hi HenryKyte, Welcome to the site!

A couple comments below, hopefully they'll be helpful to you:

Terrifying.--I don't think this single word is strong enough to hold the first line.
The treacherous hold the long-lines,--This one though could probably be a good first line.
reeling in meals with their freak fury,--Do you need their here? I like the internal rhyme and alliteration of this line. I love freak fury
and bold coastal madness.--I also like the phrasing of bold coastal madness. It sets the fishermen up as a separate species or an obsessed subculture.
Aspects all spell spaciousness,--Aspects all spell comes off a little awkward to me, a bit vague. I like the idea that spaciousness inserts but not the lead up to it in this line.
an alien tenor, tumultuous.--You've got a lot of modifiers in these next few lines. I think if one can serve it would probably tighten and strengthen the piece. In this line a tumultuous tenor may be enough. Just a thought.
These greetings, rough and granulated,--Here maybe These granulated greetings
cursing pleasant public phobias by way of nature.--you could almost just go with phobias here without the two modifiers. Since your about to draw the focus onto one individual maybe a strophe break here (optional of course)
He scrubs up rather badly,--I like the shift to the person
the evil’s in his soul,--maybe a strong image here to set the idea rather than stating it
embalmed with cheap whiskey eponyms,--that's cool. I like that I think ah Jack Daniels, Jim Beam with eponyms--great word
and the laughter of those of peer.
His facial hair, gritty unsophisticated,--again just an opinion: perhaps condense Gritty facial hair.
like his soiled hotel mattress.--Great simile
His desires keep him from the deep.--I don't think you need His here. I also think you may want to flip these last two lines and end on this one.
He speaks great talk with his fish.

Good poem. I enjoyed the read. Again, hope the comments will be helpful.

Best,

Todd