12-01-2012, 10:08 PM
Your edit is wonderful. It reads smoothly. I only saw two minor typos:
You need an apostrophe before the s on tomorrows. You also need to remove the space before the question mark.
That's it from me.
You put in the work it's obvious. You have a really good poem here.
Congrats! The work paid off.
Best,
Todd
You need an apostrophe before the s on tomorrows. You also need to remove the space before the question mark.
That's it from me.
You put in the work it's obvious. You have a really good poem here.
Congrats! The work paid off.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson