Snowmen

[Todd]

Hi penguin,

This is good. Comments below:

The children flew
and snow-hush fell
upon stone--love these first three lines. snow-hush fell is just awesome.
and by a morning--I want to cut the "a" here

the soft tattoo
of feet on felt--again wonderfully evocative language best use of tattoo I've seen to express the frozen footprints. I also like the use of felt and the alliteration throughout
froze
pitter-patter meaning.--again such great sonics with pitter-patter

He bends and forges--forges feels like the wrong word since it implies heat to me
replicas--I'm on the fence of whether you can live without this word
in remembrance
of past faces.

Shovels, brushes,
signatures;
dismembered
masterpieces.

Evocative poem. I enjoyed the read.

Best,

Todd