2026

[billy]

[i]We stand incarcerated
afraid to stage a liberation good solid opening
Instead we stand in suits, time wasted
away on useless debates and
talk of genocide while the poor contemplate suicide
the futures gone away it left a note worded is away needed?
"I'm off to hide."
So what do we have but the past and the present is 'so' and the last 'the' needed?
no thoughts of tomorrow because tomorrow's lost its presence
So dream to be president
Even dream to set precedents some nice P's
But when the rebels weapons spent rebel's (would 'are' between weapon's and spent add to the flow.)
You'll look on these words in reverence
With a broken soul how dare you try to lead a broken country
Death to the false claimers.

Help always enjoyed.

i really like this though it could lose quite a few small words. the rhyme feels good the rap rhythm works well and it doesn't feel cheesy like lots of rap poetry does. i pointed out one grammar point, there are a few. would be better with a grammar check

thanks for the read