11-30-2012, 01:16 PM
No weird or awkward diction. Some places I stumbled but I think that's mostly the punctuation, like places with ..... it just kinda threw me off
I like the repetition and how you worded a few things that adds to the intensity. It's almost like it's being told to someone crying and begging.
I like the repetition and how you worded a few things that adds to the intensity. It's almost like it's being told to someone crying and begging.