I think I saw the sun today; a peek
as carbon clouds diluted rays
not hidden by the concrete fence
protruding through the blackdrop
of a constructed concrete horizon.
A glow, a ruddy, bloody sombre show.
My partner took her photograph and smiled
I lied, agreed that yes indeed, how right she was,
the sight of light in such a way
displayed was beautiful.
A lie that filled her need.
(i also change the a to her on the last line thanks to a suggestion from todd. )1st edit i like a lot of the input so tried to utilize it, the only way i could make the end less ambiguous was to remove seemed. thanks to everyone who helped.
as carbon clouds diluted rays
not hidden by the concrete fence
protruding through the blackdrop
of a constructed concrete horizon.
A glow, a ruddy, bloody sombre show.
My partner took her photograph and smiled
I lied, agreed that yes indeed, how right she was,
the sight of light in such a way
displayed was beautiful.
A lie that filled her need.
(i also change the a to her on the last line thanks to a suggestion from todd. )1st edit i like a lot of the input so tried to utilize it, the only way i could make the end less ambiguous was to remove seemed. thanks to everyone who helped.
Quote:Smoggy Sunrise Over Tower Blocks
I think I saw the sun today; a peek
as carbon clouds redacted rays
not hidden by the concrete fence
pointedly protruding through. The black
of the horizon. Nothing showed;
a glow, a ruddy, bloody sombre show.
My partner took her photograph and smiled
I lied, agreed that yes indeed, how right she was,
the sight of light in such a way
displayed was beautiful. It seemed
to fill a need.