11-23-2012, 09:49 AM
I like the theme of the poem ie having to carry on or do something when you are dead on your feet you have some great lines (Billy already paid homage) these lines really show the reader how tired you are and thus give greater depth when you write like this. I would really enjoy to see this reworked with simple stanza's you dont need to say for what for why or climb, climb etc when you say "rocks tremble beneath my feet" because from this I see you climbing and the theme tell me your exausted. Thanks for the read TOMH