A luc Bat

[Todd]

Well you made me look up the form, and it looks like you conformed to it well. Without it being Vietnamese its hard to tell about the tonal bang trac thing. I doubt it's something we can even attempt successfully in English. After checking the form, I checked to see if the content was warped to accommodate the form. Thankfully, everything felt like it fit. I had one issue that stuck out to me, this cliche: the best is yet to come. Find a substitute and I think this is a pretty solid poem.

Just my thoughts,

Todd