A short one for review
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So sweet Big Grin

I tend to agree with billy about the last couple of lines, but otherwise there's not a lot to critique (which is not to say there isn't a lot to the poem).

I do find the analogy between soup and sewage moderately disturbing, but only because it's nearly dinner time...
It could be worse
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A short one for review - by Fatty Lumpkin - 11-22-2012, 02:52 PM
RE: A short one for review - by billy - 11-22-2012, 03:07 PM
RE: A short one for review - by Leanne - 11-22-2012, 03:42 PM
RE: A short one for review - by Bronte - 11-22-2012, 11:58 PM



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