Hey Mark,
This is solid. I want to think about it some more before fully commenting. First impression I'd cut line two. It gives too much away and steals the tension when it should be building.
I want to echo Leanne. Don't sell yourself short.
This is solid. I want to think about it some more before fully commenting. First impression I'd cut line two. It gives too much away and steals the tension when it should be building.
I want to echo Leanne. Don't sell yourself short.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson