Status Quo

[heslopian]

New version

I don’t know what
I’m doing here, anyhow.
90% of my DNA
matches a garden slug’s.
I have found my niche
somewhere between
a rat and an angel My favourite line. The whole first verse is perfect and bitterly symbolic.

I can confirm
I look better in the light,
Although the darkness
hides the cockroaches in my corner.
I’m that thin outer skin of society,
which wears sneakers and suits. This last couplet feels too obvious.

The sun still sets,
The river still flows,
Apple still invents,
And banks still invest, This line feels too much as well.
But I will always remain unresolved.

A few lines which I've mentioned are too tell and not show, but otherwise this is a very concise and well-arranged poem about conformity and isolation. The slug comparison was strange, dark and excellent. All my critique is, of course, JMHO (Just My Humble Opinion), and thanks very much for the read