Was Rumi a moth?
#3
hello mayflow!
some thoughts for you


(11-18-2012, 11:13 PM)Mayflow Wrote:  A moth drawn to a flame dies,
but as I've heard from the likes of Rumi
and such other poets ...this line did little for me; almost seems to try and steal attention
it dies in ecstasy!

Why? It is drawn by the Light
It is consumed by the Light;
It becomes the Light...i like the conciseness and repetition of the ideas here; perhaps cutting some words could make it even neater (the "why", the "it is"'s)

A poet writing a poem is consumed by the poem
Differentials are consumed...already used "consumed" many times
and oneness assimilated

Therefore I suggest evidence that Rumi
and moths are the one and the same. ...i like the idea more than the execution...you are making a pretty big leap, and i don't know if everything that has come before this point gives you enough support

Of course He was a very poetic moth,
but aren't they all?
I like the daring nature of this, though I felt like some goals were more attainable than others. It was a fun read for me. thanks for posting
Written only for you to consider.
Reply


Messages In This Thread
Was Rumi a moth? - by Mayflow - 11-18-2012, 11:13 PM
RE: Was Rumi a moth? - by Keith - 11-19-2012, 04:49 AM
RE: Was Rumi a moth? - by Philatone - 11-20-2012, 11:20 AM



Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)
Do NOT follow this link or you will be banned from the site!