11-20-2012, 07:32 AM
Well, the opening line ain't promising, but the rest is pretty good, I think. Nice rhythm and rhyme. What interests me is this: you've got quotation marks, question marks, exclamation marks and commas. Why not use full stops? I don't mind at all poems without punctuation but this annoys me intensely!Justify it.
It's Jekyll.
It's Jekyll.
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.