11-20-2012, 03:09 AM
Hi Art deco,
I am still learning the art of giving critique...I have been known to get it wrong!...so please bear this in mind.
You have some nice rhymes and manage to maintain the metre throughout most of the poem.
You kept the subject clear and well focused and made a nice switch of tone in the last two stanzas.
I thought your poem was jolly with a nice little twist at the end.
Well done and thanks for shareing.
I am still learning the art of giving critique...I have been known to get it wrong!...so please bear this in mind.
You have some nice rhymes and manage to maintain the metre throughout most of the poem.
You kept the subject clear and well focused and made a nice switch of tone in the last two stanzas.
I thought your poem was jolly with a nice little twist at the end.
Well done and thanks for shareing.