11-19-2012, 09:50 PM
with the short explanation i see this a hole lot clearer 
really enjoyed the opening almost like 'resting of your laurels' (hmm..apples
) but i LOVE the way you wrote about how the banks/bailiffs took it all away some awesome imagery in that an the bitterness IMO shines through
cant say to much about the 'how' its written as you a way betterer writer than me anyways
the only 'but' i do have is the last 2 stanzas..i dont think they add to the poem, the tale had been told already the fall from riches to finding true wealth again
that said i aint a believer soo maybe thats why i thought it droned on a bit at the end
really enjoyed the opening almost like 'resting of your laurels' (hmm..apples
) but i LOVE the way you wrote about how the banks/bailiffs took it all away some awesome imagery in that an the bitterness IMO shines through cant say to much about the 'how' its written as you a way betterer writer than me anyways
the only 'but' i do have is the last 2 stanzas..i dont think they add to the poem, the tale had been told already the fall from riches to finding true wealth again
that said i aint a believer soo maybe thats why i thought it droned on a bit at the end