11-19-2012, 03:39 PM
Wow..thanks Todd for all the work and time you put into that.
I'm still feeling my feet here, esp with recieving critique and what is an appropriate response. Am I supposed to now explain my reasoning to some of the points you raised? ( I am mostly of the persuasion that if it needs explaining to any great depth...it has failed; but the fragile ego side of me wants to justify my work!)
I really appreciate all of the comments, Overall, I think that your comments are probably spot on, in that I wrote with two hats on:- A tale of how a company is torn apart by the liquidators / religious insight into what life is about) and what i actually need to do is set asside the personal recollections and the narative of the experiance, that was my inspiration and entirly re-work this poem. So that it can stand apart from any explanation and carry a meaning of it's own.
If i'm doing a complete re-work..."...I might be gone some time"
Meanwhile my thanks to both you and Leanne.
I only joined about a week ago and before that I never would have survived a critique session without some sort of knee jerk reaction concerning feeling rejected. (Thanks Billy - I've read several of your posts on giving and recieving critique).
When Leanne first mentioned moving this to the serious board my reaction was no way! Then after some thought I realised that belonging to this site had already given me confidance to press on.
If you've ever sean the Monty Python sketch in the meaning of life where the woman in the kitchen is persuaded to let them take her liver....I felt a bit like that! "Oh go then...you've talked me into it!"
Also...just checking the small print on the liver donor form...do I now need to give 3 critiques on this board, or can I creep back onto less scary boards?
I'm still feeling my feet here, esp with recieving critique and what is an appropriate response. Am I supposed to now explain my reasoning to some of the points you raised? ( I am mostly of the persuasion that if it needs explaining to any great depth...it has failed; but the fragile ego side of me wants to justify my work!)
I really appreciate all of the comments, Overall, I think that your comments are probably spot on, in that I wrote with two hats on:- A tale of how a company is torn apart by the liquidators / religious insight into what life is about) and what i actually need to do is set asside the personal recollections and the narative of the experiance, that was my inspiration and entirly re-work this poem. So that it can stand apart from any explanation and carry a meaning of it's own.
If i'm doing a complete re-work..."...I might be gone some time"
Meanwhile my thanks to both you and Leanne.
I only joined about a week ago and before that I never would have survived a critique session without some sort of knee jerk reaction concerning feeling rejected. (Thanks Billy - I've read several of your posts on giving and recieving critique).
When Leanne first mentioned moving this to the serious board my reaction was no way! Then after some thought I realised that belonging to this site had already given me confidance to press on.
If you've ever sean the Monty Python sketch in the meaning of life where the woman in the kitchen is persuaded to let them take her liver....I felt a bit like that! "Oh go then...you've talked me into it!"
Also...just checking the small print on the liver donor form...do I now need to give 3 critiques on this board, or can I creep back onto less scary boards?