Beaten Path
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This poem had a nice flow which you mostly managed to keep, although for me I did have a stumble in a couple of places.
I think the advise above from Rose is good and I agree with what she mentioned, esp about condensing some of the lines and making the words work harder for you. Overall a well expressed and versed effort which I enjoyed reading. thanks for sharing.
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Beaten Path - by CoffeeSpoons - 11-07-2012, 10:14 AM
RE: Beaten Path - by Rose Love - 11-11-2012, 05:13 AM
RE: Beaten Path - by cidermaid - 11-18-2012, 11:22 PM
RE: Beaten Path - by drithebee - 11-05-2013, 01:52 AM
RE: Beaten Path - by ThePinsir - 11-05-2013, 02:17 AM
RE: Beaten Path - by Two_muffins - 11-05-2013, 08:38 AM
RE: Beaten Path - by Graystar - 11-05-2013, 04:49 PM
RE: Beaten Path - by aaa1993 - 11-12-2013, 03:31 PM
RE: Beaten Path - by lachaser33 - 11-16-2013, 02:30 PM
RE: Beaten Path - by tomoffing - 11-17-2013, 09:35 AM
RE: Beaten Path - by M. Warrens - 12-09-2013, 11:31 PM
RE: Beaten Path - by dialectical - 12-13-2013, 09:15 AM



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