11-18-2012, 02:51 AM
hey Todd 
thanks for commenting
i kinda left the word 'void' hanging deliberatley otherwise you killing the meaning IMO by adding somthing after it
also "Throw piercing spears so easily ?" i get you point (no pun intended
) but i think is a more intresting sentence to read than just "Throw spears so easily ?"
to 'a' or not to 'a' lol..normally you tellin me to drop un-needed words..make you mind up :p
not much thick black text from you today am soooo happy...well assuming thats a good sign ???
Mreds cheers ..an yeah am rubbish at critiquing as well am always worried about offending somone an at the mo am not that confident at me own ability writing yet..kinda feels like "teaching you grandma how to suck eggs" not that i exactly i know wot that means either
i reckon is just a case of giving you honest opinion an cross fingers like writing your crique will also improve
thanks for commentingi kinda left the word 'void' hanging deliberatley otherwise you killing the meaning IMO by adding somthing after it
also "Throw piercing spears so easily ?" i get you point (no pun intended
) but i think is a more intresting sentence to read than just "Throw spears so easily ?"to 'a' or not to 'a' lol..normally you tellin me to drop un-needed words..make you mind up :p
not much thick black text from you today am soooo happy
...well assuming thats a good sign ???Mreds cheers ..an yeah am rubbish at critiquing as well am always worried about offending somone an at the mo am not that confident at me own ability writing yet..kinda feels like "teaching you grandma how to suck eggs" not that i exactly i know wot that means either
i reckon is just a case of giving you honest opinion an cross fingers like writing your crique will also improve