11-17-2012, 06:14 PM
I found it hard to get into this one. I got the subject and felt you had comunicated what was on your mind, but for me I found the poem a little forced and perhaps lacking in flow.
Having said that there are some nice rhymes and good picture lines going on and I felt that you had given the subject a good now and real edge that brought the telling of the thought / remembrance alive.
I particularly liked the third stanza.
Having said that there are some nice rhymes and good picture lines going on and I felt that you had given the subject a good now and real edge that brought the telling of the thought / remembrance alive.
I particularly liked the third stanza.