Accountancy

[Rose Love]

cheers guys i think after reading it back i agree with a lot of the crit..pfft yeah an the cliche line lol

the only thing i dont is the 'abuse' line i feel very strongly about that but how do you mean by

"this line is a bit too telling, can you think of a way to show it instead?"..not sure i understand that

It means that poetry, to a large extent, is poetry by virtue of not stating facts straight out, but by finding other words to describe a feeling or situation. So if one were being physically abuse, for example,...it would mean finding a way to describe that without saying it outright. Words in poetry are there to manipulate however you want to get across what you want the reader to feel as intensely as you want them to feel it. The only thing I would say is that, if it were me and I were writing about physical abuse, I would definitely make sure to choose a way to express it that got across it was actual physical abuse and not metaphorical or "just" emotional abuse. Personally, I would probably not relegate even the mention of physical abuse to one line, but a person could write an entire poem about that kind of experience, or even just one incident of it. Otherwise you won't do the pain of it justice in your poem.

When writing poetry, the more you can focus on a small detail and blow it up into something, like an entire poem, the better you can become at writing poetry.

Having said that, I thought it was a very powerful poem. With poems like this, though, I am unable to overlook the content in order to look at it in a way that would be of any use technically. I tend to view and use poetry as more of a therapy than...whatever other people view and use it as.