Senryu I think

[billy]

These two sort of go together. (originally written to go with Haibun, but i'm interested to see if they stand up on thier own)



Forward facing eyes. A conquest hardened vision. A moveable feast.

Loving, liquid eyes. Love’s carriage – the wings of a dove. Coming home to roost.

Forward facing eyes.
A conquest hardened vision. not sure how to read this line? should there be a comma after conquest?
A moveable feast.

very predatorish.

Loving, liquid eyes.
Love’s carriage – the wings of a dove.
Coming home to roost. i'm possibly trying to hard to see the symbolism that i'm losing the image.