11-15-2012, 12:24 PM
i think it needs a better delineation between mayflow and eternity. possibly one or the other on each line.
was it supposed to be 'world' in the penultimate line?
it a very had thing to pull off, i'd like to see an edit in order to see if you pull it off
was it supposed to be 'world' in the penultimate line?
it a very had thing to pull off, i'd like to see an edit in order to see if you pull it off