11-14-2012, 06:23 AM
(11-14-2012, 06:11 AM)billy Wrote: a relevant poem for many, i know i can relate to it. it seems most of my free time is spent on here.I like that thanks Billy also after I posted I realised the last line is from a 70s TV show called Why Dont You
i had no nits with it apart from the last line, which seemed forced.
i do have a suggestion though
how about finishing the poem with the refrain? that way it sorts of ties the reader back into the 1st line. and gets them reading it again?
thanks for the read
(11-14-2012, 05:37 AM)Rose Love Wrote: Lol, oh, that was funny. Who can't relate to that nowadays? Yup, THAT'S why I deleted my FB account and stopped all IM chatting and quit Google+. I watch YouTube a lot, but I don't have a TV... I am still addicted to my computer though. And the Internet I suppose. SighI'm totally addicted too and were would we be without our PPP thanks for your comments RL.