I'm a Silver Fox
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Nice edit, brings out the stregnth of the lines that really count. I can feel the the desperation and you put over the lack of self worth really well (only a product of consumption) you could swap 2nd and 3rd Stanza round to give it a sense of finality, but thats just me. Thanks for the read.
TOMH
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I'm a Silver Fox - by kamirakara - 11-08-2012, 04:23 AM
RE: I'm a Silver Fox - by billy - 11-08-2012, 08:07 AM
RE: I'm a Silver Fox - by kamirakara - 11-08-2012, 11:52 PM
RE: I'm a Silver Fox - by addy - 11-10-2012, 03:50 PM
RE: I'm a Silver Fox - by kamirakara - 11-13-2012, 06:55 AM
RE: I'm a Silver Fox - by Keith - 11-13-2012, 07:27 AM
RE: I'm a Silver Fox - by kamirakara - 12-03-2012, 03:09 AM



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