11-12-2012, 03:32 AM
probably "mild critique" would be a better place.
'I love her this much. There is no "this" much
Time has beheld that which no fallacy can display
The power of it encompasseth the entirety...'
Where are the periods supposed to be? (Periods can't contain the sentences?). Is 'Time' uppercase because it's a new sentence, so the sentence-thoughts are "Time has beheld that which no fallacy can display. The power of it encompasseth the entirety of worldly phenomenon."? 'Phenomenon' feels fine, it assumes all that's of the world as a whole.
And the logic is that time, or Time, is ever present, past and present and future, and has a power that can't judge what happens. So there are no true mistakes, and no true love; all is now. To feel things, to think things, to do things. Nothing has the power to make you not feel and experience love. Who cares if love doesn't exist: it is made to exist by people, when they share this thing called 'love'.
And there might be the idea: Love is not dis-made.
it gets very wordy-fancy sounding. but it can be understood.
'I love her this much. There is no "this" much
Time has beheld that which no fallacy can display
The power of it encompasseth the entirety...'
Where are the periods supposed to be? (Periods can't contain the sentences?). Is 'Time' uppercase because it's a new sentence, so the sentence-thoughts are "Time has beheld that which no fallacy can display. The power of it encompasseth the entirety of worldly phenomenon."? 'Phenomenon' feels fine, it assumes all that's of the world as a whole.
And the logic is that time, or Time, is ever present, past and present and future, and has a power that can't judge what happens. So there are no true mistakes, and no true love; all is now. To feel things, to think things, to do things. Nothing has the power to make you not feel and experience love. Who cares if love doesn't exist: it is made to exist by people, when they share this thing called 'love'.
And there might be the idea: Love is not dis-made.
it gets very wordy-fancy sounding. but it can be understood.