The Eye

[billy]

i'd suggest editing out all the things in brackets as being extraneous.

Magic is what I see in the eye i see magic
As it looks [right] at me
Blinking [in the] same [time] as I
This is all I [can] see

Green or blue, it remains an eye
[It's] still staring at me
Lifting the eyebrow[s] high it's an eye, not a pair, so it would be one eyebrow.
Amazed I remain to be sounds like yoda speak. (i'm amazed)

Pain pushes the eye to cry
[But]I know tear drops aren't free
Blinks again, the beautiful eye
Beautiful it remains to be

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Feedback please

first off it's much of a oneness throughout the poem. some of the rhymes work though some feels forced, specially the repetitive rhymes. try and add some depth. i was expecting something along the lines of lord of the rings but it wasn't to be. in what context does the eye exist.

thanks for the read.