Soft-spoken Musings

[Philatone]

hello rose!
some thoughts for on the piece

Soft-spoken me
like a fluff of poplar...like the vowel sounds you have begun with
gliding
on tippy toes...."gliding" could be brought to this line. personal preference: "tiptoes" over "tippy toes" the latter feels less mature; maybe that makes it more appropriate in a way?
through the air

Angels
flitting
in bolts of light
to an accident scene

White light
with a golden hue
trying to reach you
through the fog...this stanza almost reads like a haiku. it's great

And the flow
the natural flow
of a joyous world
held up at the foot
of your grief...this stanza works the least for me. the repetition of "flow" didn't sit well with me; neither did the opening with "and". What is a "joyous world"? I'm not sure what this image means for the speaker; making it clearer would impact me more. I think the last two lines almost balance what comes before it; I really liked them

Everything floats
from here to you
on a wing and a prayer
if you let it.....the last line establishes quite a tone for the poem as a whole and the last stanza in particular. repeating the "on a " for "prayer" could also make the "wing" and "prayer" stand out more as equals for me. that being said, the ideas have been done before.

overall, I liked what you did here. i hope one or two ideas may help! thanks for sharing