Analgesia

[billy]

We reel ‘em in with Ritalin,
(Big Pharma pockets the profit)
Viagra and the Vitamin –
it gets so hard to come off it. clever when tied into the line ablove but the last three lines of this verse don't really work when it comes to analgesia.

Increasing dependency doses,feels clunky
the playground exchange of bright sweets;
damned by a dual diagnosis,
the endless prescription repeats.

To manage stress a bullet-proof vest
is obligatory in these quarters:
the weight you can’t get off your chest
when there’s statins in the waters.

In theatre critical poses
are struck at an unwilling heart;
before the final curtain closes
you’ll need permission to depart.

The freaks and loners seek revenge
on all those who disrespect them;
they don’t say much and have few friends -
they’re on the autistic spectrum

and exempt from human weakness
in our analgesic Eden
where all suffering is sickness
and susceptible to treatment. enjoyed this verse.

i like the idea and the attempt to tie the title in but my biggest nit is the meter, in more than a couple of place i have to read a line twice or three times to make it work. the rhyme scheme doesn't scream out but that's a good thing. the last verse is the one that stands out for me. and sums up best what you're trying to say. it sets the bar and in general i don't think the other verses match it.

great to see you back
thanks for the read.