under a gibbous moon

[Keith]

like goblins
listening in darkness
we suck our breath and hum feels like a dark ritual has begun and in only 3 lines
with the flat thwacking flat and thwacking sound great on their own not sure, with the, is needed here
as I strike your kneecaps
and hammer your ribcage marimba googled but great image
with makeshift mallets

of wooden spoons this seems light and playfull so out of kilter with the intensity of the last stanza
the rasping notes
unfurling like ebony petals
in the witching hour
of a midnight garden


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like goblins
listening in darkness
we suck our breath and hum
with the flat thwacking

as I strike your kneecaps
and hammer your ribcage marimba
with makeshift mallets
of wooden spoons

the rasping notes
unfurling like ebony petals
in the witching hour
of a midnight garden

Hi Aish
Thanks for the read , I enjoyed this and now cant stop saying (flat thwack) in a clockwork orange kinda way.