11-02-2012, 08:44 AM
How is this for feedback?
I let my mom read it today. I was busy doing something and had pulled the page up on my phone for her and I forgot about it because I was plumbing, but then it hit me that she never said if she liked it. So I half-started to yell (because I thought she had walked off) 'So what do ya think?' and as I looked up I saw that she had sat down on the bed holding my phone and her face was covered with tears.
I am a serious fan of this poem and I'm sorry that none of this is actual line-by-line technical stuff.
I will shut up now :p
I let my mom read it today. I was busy doing something and had pulled the page up on my phone for her and I forgot about it because I was plumbing, but then it hit me that she never said if she liked it. So I half-started to yell (because I thought she had walked off) 'So what do ya think?' and as I looked up I saw that she had sat down on the bed holding my phone and her face was covered with tears.
I am a serious fan of this poem and I'm sorry that none of this is actual line-by-line technical stuff.
I will shut up now :p