10-30-2012, 07:13 AM
Hi CoffeeSpoons - welcome, and good for you, to write your first poem. It's great to see you take on board many of the suggestions, and revise your poem. Now you yourself start to see what it needs next!
Yes, I think you're on the right track with it, and it could still do with trimming - tweaking - whatever you want to call it. You can't do too much of that.
Remember Paul Valery - "Poems are never finished - just abandoned"
Yes, I think you're on the right track with it, and it could still do with trimming - tweaking - whatever you want to call it. You can't do too much of that.
Remember Paul Valery - "Poems are never finished - just abandoned"