10-21-2012, 08:56 AM
excellent so far. i got up to
After his dad left though, he’d returned them to their proper places. It suddenly seemed important that families should stay together.
but i have lots of posts and other stuff to do so i'll have to do the read bit by bit
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so far i think you have a good insite into mother son, son friend relationships. can't see anything so far that doesn't work. maybe a bit more angst from the boy but thats just a nit. it feels well written.
After his dad left though, he’d returned them to their proper places. It suddenly seemed important that families should stay together.
but i have lots of posts and other stuff to do so i'll have to do the read bit by bit
. so far i think you have a good insite into mother son, son friend relationships. can't see anything so far that doesn't work. maybe a bit more angst from the boy but thats just a nit. it feels well written.