10-21-2012, 05:06 AM
lol remains to be seen :p
but you gotta care about the characters in the first place ? Ally's character so far is pretty cool but Eddie =douche like a character from the FD films more intrested how he dies that why kinda thing
you got him in a good place in the story but theres gotta be more anger from him an rebellion
kidz at 15 are more about themselfs an wot effects them than other people views
BTW if you publish i want a free sighned copy cos am officially the first to publicly review the draft
but you gotta care about the characters in the first place ? Ally's character so far is pretty cool but Eddie =douche like a character from the FD films more intrested how he dies that why kinda thing
you got him in a good place in the story but theres gotta be more anger from him an rebellion
kidz at 15 are more about themselfs an wot effects them than other people views
BTW if you publish i want a free sighned copy cos am officially the first to publicly review the draft