Welcome coffeespoons 
. Always nice to see someone taking their first steps into writing poetry
My interpretation of this is about someone who's having a personal crisis against the backdrop of a relationship; in the end it's predominantly about self-questioning and about his personal frustrations. I liked the intimate little details and touches that made the narrator more human to me. I think the poems high points are when it uses concrete imagery to express the story. It is less successful when it relies and overloads on abstractions --- "It is selfish and wanting, subjective and haunting" ... [undefined=undefined]"It is simple yet preposterous"[/undefined]... as a reader I'm not that interested in being told, I'd rather you try to express the contradicting feelings in your own way, using your own vision. Thanks very much for the read
. Always nice to see someone taking their first steps into writing poetryMy interpretation of this is about someone who's having a personal crisis against the backdrop of a relationship; in the end it's predominantly about self-questioning and about his personal frustrations. I liked the intimate little details and touches that made the narrator more human to me. I think the poems high points are when it uses concrete imagery to express the story. It is less successful when it relies and overloads on abstractions --- "It is selfish and wanting, subjective and haunting" ... [undefined=undefined]"It is simple yet preposterous"[/undefined]... as a reader I'm not that interested in being told, I'd rather you try to express the contradicting feelings in your own way, using your own vision. Thanks very much for the read
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?